Group Member: Chris Jenkins, Carlyle Shirley, Daniel Laird
I. Intro Paragraph - Perhaps Analyze a Photograph of a poster on overweight children?
A. This "Intro" uses the photo to give a brief rundown of America's dilemma.
B. Thesis- At the close of this piece, the thesis of the compilation should be introduced.
II. Emotional Effects
A. Present emotional benefits of exercise in general
B. Present the emotional effects of the school atmosphere
C. Compare and contrast how gym classes will effect students emotionally
III. Physical Effects
A. Present the health dilemma in the United State - more specifically - in children
B. Present how healthy behavior will effect students
IV. Scholarly Effects
A. Present the correlation between both emotions and physical well being on grades
B. Discuss the alternative of gym time over classroom time to improve grades
V. Conclusion- Briefly negate opposition - Run through points and lay down a solid finish.
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At this point, I'm unsure as to whether or not your group supports or opposes dodgeball in school. Although it is important to validate both sides, it is still important to have a clear opinion.
I noticed in your topic you mentioned teamwork. I think you should mention how in physical education, team sports are usually played in which you have to work together to get anything accomplished. This makes your great argument even stronger than it already is.
This is a great topic, i think that physical education in schools is very beneficial to all students. This project can show how it benefits the students, also what effects it has on grades. If you could find studies that show a correlation between exercise and grades that could provide good supporting evidence for your opinion.
I think you have a logical flow for an argument but I am not sure whether or not you are for exercise or not. Putting pictures in and describing your counterargument can help support your reasonings.
I like how you have 3 clear benefits that you are arguing for: emotional, physical, and academic. I think athletics also have significant social benefits. People learn to trust each other, motivate each other, and work together to achieve a common goal. I don't know, it may be worth mentioning. But I like what you have.
I like the idea of beginning with an op-ad (opinion advertisement, talked about in chapter 7). Briefly analyzing strong op-ad will add options to your argument.
Your appeal is logos, so this argument should not be opinion based. Use statistics.
Your conclusion is sssoooooooooo vague.
-Candace
I really like your topic. It also seems like your argument has a strong foundation. You may be able to find more helpful information by searching for dodgeball league home pages. I played in a competitive dodgeball league and I know the founders had an article in a magazine making a similar argument as you guys. It looks like you will have a good project.
I like that your outline is organized and easy to understand. I can tell exactly where you are going with your argument and am excited to see how you present it.
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